Classroom Critique

After presenting my rough draft of the cover, TOC, and the DPS, I have gotten back critique from my classmates and my teacher. Here I will be saying what they told me in order to help me reflect and do better when I go back to edit it for my final.

COVER:

For my cover I didn't receive much feedback to change anything. My classmates and teacher liked it. They liked the idea of the splashes of paint and central image and the colors on how it's not messy even with the splashes. Though just a few things that they wanted me to fix was to add a fourth cover line since the minimum of cover lines should be 5 including the main cover line. Then it was to make the masthead bigger. Lastly just to fix the date. It should be "April 2025" or a season.

TOC:

Here I got a lot of mixed answers because some wanted something different than what the others wanted. I asked my class on help on how to fix the decorations because it looks like it's for kids, but my target audience is teens to young adults. Some said to keep the pictures in a straight line like how I already have it but then others said that it'll be good if I would set it out like a zig zag. Have two on one side and two on the other. Then for the table of contents was to change the color or the size/ font because it doesn't really pop out. Then to take out a few of the paint splashes to have it less messy. Now to set it more organized was to make the articles into two columns. Also, there's a few mistakes I had done. I need to fix the numbering of the articles, add more articles, and then number the page. But they did like my photos and the all the bright colors I'm using to show how it's a fun art article.

DPS:

My classmates said that there's a few things I can change. For the title of the article, I can use a different color since it kind of blends into the plaint splashes in the corner. Then from that they said I can also consider changing the paint splashes with other elements, but I'll have to be thinking on what other elements I can use to decorate my double-page spread. To fix the paragraphs from looking long can be to have the lines go from left to right. Also, since one page is going to be the interview I had with Ms. Diaz, that's going to be its separate page so I'm adding a third page. Lastly, they liked my pictures that I have taken. There wasn't much saying for my double-page spread since I haven't finished it, but this is my progress so far.

Reflection:

I'm glad that we had our class do critiques of each other's drafts because I was struggling to find ways on how to decorate it, set out the pictures, and organize the text. Doing an article on art is hard because it can easily look like it's for a young audience when I want it to be for teens/young adults but hearing my classmates and teacher feedback I know now how to work my way through this. I was struggling mostly with the TOC, but I had gotten enough help that I have a plan now.